Ms LB

Bad luck baby Late in bars, through glazey bars of light on glass and stumbling up hills, too far from her. Late in bars, far from her... once a skip, ...

Dear PSouth This is getting more interesting. It is a lot more detailed than your first chapter, and the dialogue is really good, it give the story life. I think ...

This is an interesting set up. Can tell it will be an interesting story. The two voices and two perspectives have potential to create a gripping dynamic. I think to ...